[text] i could say i'm sorry but i'm not (except i am. i really, really am.)

[frostythehitman]

I've finally got this song together, but I'm still stumped on the title. I'm putting the lyrics in here for anyone who's got any ideas. Consider this an open call for song title suggestions.


Lyrics:
You punched a hole in my heart, and now
I'm an empty vessel, waiting for the music to fill the blank spaces.
What am I supposed to do now?
Nothing left but to forget all the sneering faces

I feel like a forgotten bag of chips abandoned on the streets, my soul shattered and scattering to the winds like potato leaves.
I’d break the whole world if I could
Just to make sure no one ever has to grieves
Again, and I'd break the whole world but I don't think that I should

The emptiness inside of me is hardening like cement
And now there's nothing that can fit through the cracks and spaces
Nothing left but to watch the spiraling descent
Nothing left but to remember all the sneering faces

I feel like a forgotten bag of chips abandoned on the streets, my soul shattered and scattering to the winds like potato leaves.
I’d break the whole world if I could
Just to make sure no one ever has to grieves
Again, and I'd break the whole world but I don't think that I should

[fade out]

Comments

[clear_eyes]

I'm sorry for this but.

"Lays Me Down to Sleep"?

[beastenderblood]

All right, here's my thought: that section on potato leaves? Really captures the essence of the piece. You should focus on that

[twelfthspark]

oh my god

[liberal_arts]

Try as I might, I'm just not feeling the bag of chips thing. Do potatoes even have leaves?

[frostythehitman]

What does sleeping have to do with it?

[ He's not very big on puns, unfortunately. ]

[frostythehitman]

So name it something like "Potato Leaves"?

Nah, too simple. Maybe something like "The Vending Machine Lottery of Life."

[frostythehitman]

Not helpful.

There's at least five other songs already called "Oh My God," I'm not about to make this a sixth.

[frostythehitman]

No see that's the point.

It's a metaphor.

[voicelessresistance]

'Fill Me'

[twelfthspark]

That wasn't a suggestion, it was a review. 'No one ever has to grieves'? I've seen better rhymes in a Dr. Seuss book.

[frostythehitman]

Yeah, well I'd like to see you try and write a song from scratch and tell me how easy it is.

[frostythehitman]

...with what?

[voicelessresistance]

No.

You wanted a song name.

[frostythehitman]

Yeah, I know. I'm asking about the rest of it. "Fill Me" with what?

[voicelessresistance]

Does it matter?

The song seems to be about dealing with a kind of unwanted emptiness.
So.

'fill me' as the title.

[beastenderblood]

[Oh my GOD.]

That's good man, that's real good. You're onto something here.

[meshiakh]

Wow!! You have such a way with words!
I really love it! (≧∇≦)ﾉ
Especially "I'd break the whole world but I don't think that I should"!
You definitely shouldn't, that'll be too much work!

How about "Neglected Potato"?

[frostythehitman]

Really?

You know, it's weird. I thought I asked for song title suggestions, not sarcasm.

[1/2]

[frostythehitman]

Huh. I guess you're right.

[2/2]

[frostythehitman]

I still think it sounds like something you'd find on pornhub, though.

[voicelessresistance]

Heh. Probably.

Does that matter to you?
The song and the name are about what they means to you.
Not to everyone else.

[beastenderblood]

Nah man, I'm being 100% serious here. Let's working off the vending machine thing. Something like

"My Chips Got Stuck On The Spring Thing"

or

"Someone Used Chalk On My Empty Cement Body"

[frostythehitman]

[ James has never witnessed someone be so positive about emo music before. It's...really weird. But not unwelcome. ]

Thanks?

"Neglected Potato" is a little too obvious though, don't you think?

[frostythehitman]

Technically speaking, sure, but it's not gonna help me if everyone else thinks my song's a laughingstock because it's got the same name as whatever they knocked one out to last night.

1/2

[frostythehitman]