[text] i could say i'm sorry but i'm not (except i am. i really, really am.)

[frostythehitman]

I've finally got this song together, but I'm still stumped on the title. I'm putting the lyrics in here for anyone who's got any ideas. Consider this an open call for song title suggestions.


Lyrics:
You punched a hole in my heart, and now
I'm an empty vessel, waiting for the music to fill the blank spaces.
What am I supposed to do now?
Nothing left but to forget all the sneering faces

I feel like a forgotten bag of chips abandoned on the streets, my soul shattered and scattering to the winds like potato leaves.
I’d break the whole world if I could
Just to make sure no one ever has to grieves
Again, and I'd break the whole world but I don't think that I should

The emptiness inside of me is hardening like cement
And now there's nothing that can fit through the cracks and spaces
Nothing left but to watch the spiraling descent
Nothing left but to remember all the sneering faces

I feel like a forgotten bag of chips abandoned on the streets, my soul shattered and scattering to the winds like potato leaves.
I’d break the whole world if I could
Just to make sure no one ever has to grieves
Again, and I'd break the whole world but I don't think that I should

[fade out]

Comments

[clear_eyes]

... Yes? I mean, you worked hard on it, right? I don't want to just make fun of that.

[frostythehitman]

Well damn. Now I feel like a jerk. Here I thought you were just being mean.

[clear_eyes]

I guess it's hard to tell over text. I've been in that situation a lot myself.

[frostythehitman]

Yeah, chats and IMs and stuff are always harder to get a read on.

Also a lot harder to actually get into a fight with someone over.

[clear_eyes]

Well rest assured, I'm not trying to fight you.

Anyway, I'm always impressed when someone just makes an effort to be creative. That takes a lot more courage than I'd ever have.

[frostythehitman]

Yeah, that's why it always gets my goat that there's some jerks out there who always bag on good, honest bands just for putting their stuff out there.

Like those guys have ever made anything decent in their lives.

[clear_eyes]

It takes a lot of courage to get yourself out there in general. Even if your work isn't that great to start off, that's how you learn and get better, right?

A lot of people don't appreciate that.

[frostythehitman]

[ Thank god for the Internet creating enough of a physical barrier to keep him from doing anything rash. And for giving him enough time and space to cool down from comments. ]

Okay, I'm gonna let that one slide because I'm 80% sure that you weren't saying my songs are crap. But seriously. You have got to start thinking about how you phrase this stuff.

But yeah, the indie scene isn't always full of great music but at least it's genuine and it's raw.

[clear_eyes]

Oh. Uhm. Geez, I can see how I that would read that way. Personally, I like music a lot but I need to hear it performed before I can really form an opinion.

I was talking more towards that everyone has to start somewhere and no one's allowed to be a work in progress or develop themselves. Music, writing, it's all the same. People seem more interested in criticizing a work right off than helping it develop and I don't think that's really fair.

Sorry if I keep giving you the wrong impression.

it literally took me like a week and a half to figure out how to tag this fml

[frostythehitman]

Well if you need to hear it performed, I'm gonna be playing in venues and posting this album online once it's done. And then you can call it crap all you want.

it's fine!

[clear_eyes]

... I don't know what to say to that last part, other than I look forward to listening to it and sharing my honest opinion.